Critique my first resume please!

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by ismail.magued · 8 years ago In reply to Critique my first resume ...

first of all erase the experience from the introductory section.
the introduction short and sweet.

try to push your former employers for a certification it goes to your cv.

try to push the school you were at for a formal diploma on paper.

last of all let see, u need as well to keep track of your employment.
dont let your cv go out of date.

it is crucial to shorten the bullet points
into sentences.
shorter sentences.

use words that are districtive in nature
that catches the eyes of the interviewer.

and add a section about your characteristics that match the job u want

one other thing

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well if you need further instance dont hestitate to reply to this post

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by Cazten · 8 years ago In reply to critique

Thanks for the reply. I went ahead and removed the experience section at the very top. To answer a few points first off i should point out.

1. My current employment is the ONLY employment I've ever had, its not a neglect of resume updating. Adding to that I'm only 20 years old, and the company was a family run company of which i am a partner of (thus the vice president title i put which is true). Theoretically i was nothing more than an hourly laborer. However i did maintain the company website (which didn't need frequent updating), and the home office network (which isn't exactly rocket science lol). Since i have zero experience im more or less using a "white lie" to make it sound like i have some experience doing at least something minuscule.

2. I cant push the schooling any harder. This was my first semester changing to an IT major and im pushing 17 units. Next semester with like 6 units ill have a certificate of achievement in the infosec security (which is an A.S minus the general ed). The semester following that hopefully an A.S in all three, or 2 at minimum. Ill also be adding the security+ cert as soon as I have the money. Unfortunately my employers (my parents) cant help much since we've all been unemployed in the construction industry for 10months. Hopefully if I get my unemployment I just filed for ill be able to take the cert.

Ill consider shortening the bullets into sentences instead. Ill see how it looks both ways. But as it stands 70% of the bulleted information is theoretical knowledge from books, not practical experience.

Also how would you format a characteristics section to tailor to the employer? I considered this already tailored to a network admin/beginning security type of deal as all the info focuses on those two subjects that I have listed as skills and experience.

Thankyou.

Anyone else for comments?

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by Cazten · 8 years ago In reply to Critique my first resume ...

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